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Some people believe that a greater difference in age between parents and children is more beneficial

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I think disadvantage outweigh more than advantages.
I prefer to the small gap between parents and children.
There are two reason.
First, they can keep good relationship like a friend.
then, they share all most of their life for example school life, something to worry about and shopping
Second, they can go to trip together.
actually, I and my mom , pop enjoy traveling abroad.
of course, the big gap age is also enjoying traveling however they tend to don't be well.

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Good Morning Lizy~! ^^ 
It's a new day to enjoy. May you be filled with joy today and have a good spirit continually! Thanks for doing your homework~! ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
>>> CORRECT
I prefer to the small gap between parents and children.
>>> I prefer the small gap between parents and children.
There are two reasons.
>>> CORRECT
First, they can keep a good relationship like friends.
>>> CORRECT
then, they share all most of their life for example school life, something to worry about and shopping
>>> Then, they share most of their life for example school life, wariness about and shopping.
Second, they can go on a trip together.
>>> CORRECT
actually, I and my mom , pop enjoy traveling abroad.
>>> Actually, I and my mom enjoy traveling abroad.
of course, the big gap age is also enjoying traveling however they tend to don't be well.
>>> Of course, the big age gap can also enjoy traveling however, but they tend not to do it well.
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