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The Pirated products problem in my country.

작성자: 김*해
2021-01-08 403

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Q. Where can you buy pirated products in your country? Is it legal to sell fake items in the market?
In my country, To sell fake items in the major market is officially illegal.
But as I know, In the black markets that were hided in places hard to see like subway and basement markets,
the pirated products is being sold secretly. Although the government has enforced related laws, the secret transactions have not disappeared in the market yet.
Like many other foreign countries, also in my country, There are a lot of pirated products made in china. It is almost secretly smuggled from china by the brokers. And the others that doesn't not need to be smuggled like fake clothes are made in bulk in the factories.
As I majored in the fashion design, I think creativity is one of the most important rights that should be protected by the raw.
So, I think the government has to continuously reinforce the raws related pirated products, and protect the rights of originators and consumers.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Wow! 
This information is so interesting to learn about. ^^ 
We also have black markets in my country, and they also sell some fakes. 
It's so fascinating how some things are similar from both countries.


~t. Ally


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In my country, To sell fake items in the major market is officially illegal.
>> In my country, selling fake items in the major market is illegal by law.

But as I know, In the black markets that were hided in places hard to see like subway and basement markets,
the pirated products is being sold secretly. 
>> But as far as I know, in the black markets that are hidden in hard to see places like the subways and basement markets, the pirated products are being sold secretly.

Although the government has enforced related laws, the secret transactions have not disappeared in the market yet.
>> CORRECT!

Like many other foreign countries, also in my country, There are a lot of pirated products made in china. 
>> Like many other foreign countries, there are a lot of pirated products that are made in China.

It is almost secretly smuggled from china by the brokers. 
>> Most of the products are secretly smuggled from China by brokers.

And the others that doesn't not need to be smuggled like fake clothes are made in bulk in the factories.
>> And the others that don't need to be smuggled, like fake clothes, are made in bulk in factories.

As I majored in the fashion design, I think creativity is one of the most important rights that should be protected by the raw.
>> As I majored in fashion design, I believe that creativity is one of the most important rights that should be protected by the law.

So, I think the government has to continuously reinforce the laws related pirated products, and protect the rights of originators and consumers.
>>  CORRECT!
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