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What do you consider the most dangerous/scary robot ever invented?

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In my opinion, the most scary thing about robots is that they may replace human beings and reduce human workforce. As robots are much more productive than humans, a lot of companies will try to use robots instead of humans. A lot of people who work in the manufacturing industry may lose jobs. This kind of social problem may cause more severe social class polarization, which increases the gap between the poor and the rich. Only those people who invent robots or research about artificial intelligence may maintain their jobs and other simple work forces will soon be replaced. Furthermore, if human beings lose control of the robots, it will definitely cause problems. As seen in the movies or books, they may harm human beings and do whatever they want. The world ruled by robots will be devastated quickly and a lot of human beings may lose their life's purpose.

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It was well-explained, Minhee! I like your thoughts about the topic! Good! -Faith-
In my opinion, the most scary thing about robots is that they may replace human beings and reduce human workforce.
>> CORRECT
As robots are much more productive than humans, a lot of companies will try to use robots instead of humans. 
>> As robots are much more productive than humans, a lot of companies prefer to use them. 
A lot of people who work in the manufacturing industry may lose jobs. 
>> A lot of people who work in manufacturing industries may lose their jobs.
This kind of social problem may cause more severe social class polarization, which increases the gap between the poor and the rich.
>> This kind of social problem may cause more severe social class polarization which increases the gap between the poor and the rich.
Only those people who invent robots or research about artificial intelligence may maintain their jobs and other simple work forces will soon be replaced. 
>> CORRECT
Furthermore, if human beings lose control of the robots, it will definitely cause problems. 
>> CORRECT
OR: Furthermore, when robots are out of control, it would be a threat to humans.
As seen in the movies or books, they may harm human beings and do whatever they want.
>> CORRECT
The world ruled by robots will be devastated quickly and a lot of human beings may lose their life's purpose.
>> CORRECT
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