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As a Korean citizen, what do you think should the government focus on nowadays? Why?

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I think the government should take care of 2 problems. one is about real estate price which is getting higher terriblely. that can be caused most of young married couple has problems to get their own house for their life. the other one is young people's unemployment that is higher, too. government is trying to stop students go out to working. but they must be realized that reason by discussing with a council member or even company owners

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Hi, Kevin!~ 

These are really big concerns that must be paid attention to by the government. 
I feel quite bad that most Koreans have these struggles. 

~t. Ally


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I think the government should take care of 2 problems.
>> CORRECT!
 
one is about real estate price which is getting higher terriblely.
>> The first one is about the price of real estate, which is increasing terribly.

that can be caused most of young married couple has problems to get their own house for their life.
>> This issue can cause problems for most of young married couples as it would be hard for them to buy their own house.

the other one is young people's unemployment that is higher, too.
>> The other one is about the unemployment rate of young people, which is getting higher as well.

government is trying to stop students go out to working.
>> The government is trying to stop students from working abroad.

but they must be realized that reason by discussing with a council member or even company owners.
>> But they must realize the reason why the youth want to do such things by discussing it with council members, or even company owners.
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