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The most beautiful country that I have ever been was America

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I like America. Also, I like America's winter. When the winter is come, In the America the snow is really really so~many in my house field. In that season, I play snow fight, making a snowman, and play tag. It is very fun, but play very fun it will be cold so, I drink hot chocolate, than it will be warm.
Anyway, I travel China, Japan, Hong Kong, and America, but the most beautiful country that I have ever been was America.

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Hi there once again Maria!

America sounds so fun to be in here on your composition! I wonder if it is snowing so hard there right now. Well, you are actually very lucky that you do not have snow that much. Some people there dread the cold winter.

Anyway, thanks for sharing your experience in going to America. I am sure you will visit there again in time.

See you in class!

-T. Donna =)

I like America. Also, I like America's winter. 
>> Correct!

When the winter is come, In the America the snow is really really so~many in my house field. 
>> When the winter comes, in the America, the snow is really really so much on the ground. 

In that season, I play snow fight, making a snowman, and play tag. 
>> For that reason, I play snow fight, make a snow man, and play tag.

It is very fun, but play very fun it will be cold so, I drink hot chocolate, than it will be warm.
>> It is very fun, but playing is more fun. When it will be cold, I drink hot chocolate, then it will be warm.

Anyway, I travel China, Japan, Hong Kong, and America, but the most beautiful country that I have ever been was America.
>> Anyway, I traveled to China, Japan, Hong Kong, and America, but the most beautiful country that I have ever been was America.
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