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Q) What food would you like to eat everyday and not get tired of?

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I think Kimchi is the food that I never get sick of. I always eat Kimchi every day.
Actually there are many kinds of Kimchi.
The type of Kimchi depends on the ingredients and the way it is made.
Kimchi has lot of lactic acid bacteria. And It helps us digest.

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I think Kimchi is the food that I never get sick of. I always eat Kimchi every day.
I think Kimchi is the food that I will never sick. I eat Kimchi everyday.

Actually there are many kinds of Kimchi.
>>CORRECT

The type of Kimchi depends on the ingredients and the way it is made.
>>CORRECT

Kimchi has lot of lactic acid bacteria. And It helps us digest.
>> Kimchi has a lot of lactic acid bacteria which helps us digest food easily. 
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