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Please tell me about a serious issue that your school faced before.

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A serious issue that my school faced is that our school is now in danger of being closed. I go to private highschool which is specialized at teaching foreign languages. My school was established around 1980 and has a long history. A lot of famous politicians or lawyers have graduated our school and as a result, gets a lot of investment from them. However, this fact breeds discontent to others. Some feel unjustful that only a few students are getting high-quality education from young age. As a result, as the new government was elected at 2017, the president decided to close specialized private schools around 2025. A lot of school administrators and teachers are fighting against the government to withdraw its decision, but the government seem to be very firm with what they have decided. Although it¡¯s important to provide fair education to all the students in a country, I believe my school should continue to exist to cultivate more talented people.

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Hi, Minhee! I sympathize with you and your school! It must be tough for them because they only aim quality education! However, I hope you are still optimistic and hopeful! -Faith-
A serious issue that my school faced is that our school is now in danger of being closed.
>> The serious issue that my school is facing now is that our school is in danger of being closed.
I go to private highschool which is specialized at teaching foreign languages. 
>> I go to a private highschool which specialized at teaching foreign languages. 
My school was established around 1980 and has a long history. 
>> CORRECT
A lot of famous politicians or lawyers have graduated our school and as a result, gets a lot of investment from them. 
>> A lot of famous politicians or lawyers have graduated from our school and as a result, it gets a lot of investment from them. 
However, this fact breeds discontent to others. 
>> However, this fact breeds discontentment among several people. 
Some feel unjustful that only a few students are getting high-quality education from young age. 
>> Some feel indignant that only a few students are getting high-quality education from a young age. 
As a result, as the new government was elected at 2017, the president decided to close specialized private schools around 2025. 
>> As a result, when the new president was elected at 2017, he decided to close specialized private schools around 2025. 
A lot of school administrators and teachers are fighting against the government to withdraw its decision, but the government seem to be very firm with what they have decided. 
>> A lot of school administrators and teachers are fighting against the government to withdraw its decision, but the government seems to be very firm with what they have decided.
Although it¡¯s important to provide fair education to all the students in a country, I believe my school should continue to exist to cultivate more talented people.
>> Although it¡¯s important to provide fair education to all students worldwide, I believe my school should continue to exist to cultivate more talented people.

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