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What is something that you need to focus on improving this 2021?
-> I think I need to focus on more study to improve this 2021.
First, I'm going to middle school, and middle school's study is more harder than elementary school's study.
Second, study is very helpful to us for living this land, and living this life.
So I think I need to focus on more study to improve this 2021.

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I think I need to focus on more study to improve this 2021.
>> I think I need to focus on more studying this 2021. 

First, I'm going to middle school, and middle school's study is more harder than elementary school's study.
>> First, I'm about to go to middle school which requires more studying than elementary schools. 

Second, study is very helpful to us for living this land, and living this life.
>> Lastly, studying is an essential for living.

So I think I need to focus on more study to improve this 2021.
>> So I think I need to focus more on studying.
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