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The factors I consider before I take advice

작성자: 조*아
2021-01-25 301

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Many people are not willing to take others' advice. Because it is really hard to admit my fault and accept others' opinions. However, if you use others' advice well, you can grow up more than before.
Before I take others' advice, I consider the mind of people who advised. If they really consider me and give advice sincerely, I accept advice and feel thankful. Perhaps they try to help me, and it can be a chance for me to become a better person!
Next, I consider the attitude of people who advised. If they try to ridicule me and blame me, I don't have to take their advice because it is not "advice."
Lastly, I consider the value of advice; whether it is useful or not. If someone gives me advice sincerely but it isn't useful, I don't have to take it. Useful advice is priceless. I should take it even though I feel uncomfortable.

Teacher, I'm sorry but I don't have enough time to do my homework :( (Because I should study other things.) I couldn't do my homework anymore. I'm so sorry!

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Nice thoughts, Mina! Indeed, a wise man does follow good advice. Anyway, you don't have to apologize if you could no longer do your homework because of your priorities nowadays. Just try to do it at your most convenient time. -Faith-

Many people are not willing to take others' advice. Because it is really hard to admit my fault and accept others' opinions.

>> Many people are not willing to take others' advice because it is really hard to admit one's fault and accept others' opinions.

However, if you use others' advice well, you can grow up more than before.

>>However, if you listen to others' advice well, you can grow up more than before.
 Before I take others' advice, I consider the mind of people who advised.

>> Before I take others' advice, I consider the intention of the people who advise me.

If they really consider me and give advice sincerely, I accept advice and feel thankful.

>> If they really show their concern to me and give their advice sincerely, I will accept those and I will be feeling thankful to them.

Perhaps they try to help me, and it can be a chance for me to become a better person!

>> Perhaps, they just try to help me, and it can be a chance for me to become a better person!
Next, I consider the attitude of people who advised.

>> Next, I consider the attitude.

If they try to ridicule me and blame me, I don't have to take their advice because it is not "advice."

>> If they try to ridicule me and blame me, then I don't have to take their advice because I would think it is not genuine.
Lastly, I consider the value of advice; whether it is useful or not.

>> CORRECT

If someone gives me advice sincerely but it isn't useful, I don't have to take it.

>>  CORRECT

OR: If some sincere advice aren't that applicable, then I don't have to take them.

Useful advice is priceless.

>> A piece of useful advice is priceless. 

I should take it even though I feel uncomfortable.

>> CORRECT

OR: I must take it whether I like it or not.
Teacher, I'm sorry but I don't have enough time to do my homework :( (Because I should study other things.)

>> Teacher, I'm sorry but I don't have enough time to do my homework :( (because I should study other things).

I couldn't do my homework anymore.

>> CORRECT

I'm so sorry!

>> CORRECT
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