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I think the disadvantages of using credit cards outweighs the advantages of it.
One of the reason is if we use credit cards, we don¡¯t now how much we used.
In fact, nowadays most Koreans use credit cards when they pay for somethings
But since we used credit cards, credit delinquents have increased consistently.
Of course, It is easy and convenient to use credit cards than cash, but the result of convenience is to increase credit delinquents.
So, if we use credit cards for our convenience, I suggest using debit cards than credit cards
The other reason is problem of privacy.
Whenever we pay for somethings using credit cards, our private information is stored and used for marketing or promotion by various company.
For example, after we bought something, we have seen advertisements about it again on internet before.
It is proof that our privacy is violated by using credit cards.
In conclusion, I think the disadvantages of using credit cards outweigh advantages for these reasons.

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think the disadvantages of using credit cards outweighs the advantages of it.
>>> CORRECT
One of the reason is if we use credit cards, we don¡¯t now how much we used.
>>> One of the reason is if we use credit cards, we don¡¯t know how much we could used.
In fact, nowadays most Koreans use credit cards when they pay for some things.
>>> CORRECT
But since we used credit cards, credit delinquents have increased consistently.
>>> CORRECT
Of course, It is easy and convenient to use credit cards than cash, but the result of convenience is to increase credit delinquents.
>>> Of course, it is easier and it's more convenient to use credit cards than cash, but the result of convenience is to increase credit delinquents.
So, if we use credit cards for our convenience, I suggest using debit cards than credit cards.
>>> So, if we use credit cards for our convenience, I suggest the use of debit cards than credit cards.
The other reason is problem of privacy.
>>> The other reason is privacy issues.
Whenever we pay for somethings using credit cards, our private information is stored and used for marketing or promotion by various company.
>>> Whenever we pay for some things using credit cards, our private information is stored and used for marketing or promotion by various company.
For example, after we bought something, we have seen advertisements about it again on internet before.
>>> CORRECT
It is proof that our privacy is violated by using credit cards.
>>> It is a proof that our privacy is violated in using credit cards.
In conclusion, I think the disadvantages of using credit cards outweigh the advantages for these reasons.
>>> CORRECT
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