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What do you really hate having to do in your free time? And why do you hate it?
-> Yes, I hate some of things such as writing, and memorizing something having in my free time.
First thing is writing book report. It is painful to my right hand because of writing book report.
Second thing is memorizing China word. Some of Korea word is made up of China word, so I have to memorize it.
So I hate writing book report and memorizing China word having in my free time.

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Yes, I hate some of things such as writing, and memorizing something having in my free time.
>>  I hate some of things such as writing and memorizing something during my free time.

First thing is writing book report. 
>> First is writing book reports. 

It is painful to my right hand because of writing book report.
>>Sometimes it's painful for my right hand because of all the writing. 

Second thing is memorizing China word. Some of Korea word is made up of China word, so I have to memorize it.
>> Another one is memorizing Chinese words. Some Korean words are made up of Chinese words that we need to memorize. 

So I hate writing book report and memorizing China word having in my free time.
>> So I hate writing book report and memorizing China word during my free time.
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