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When do children leave their parents\' home in your country?

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In my country, usally 25 years old leave from their parents.
They starts to the work. and alone live in rental house.
They starts to the work. and then they will alone live in rental house.
In my case, actually, I Independent 20years old.
since then, I am not receive petty cash from my parents.

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Here are my corrections for you:


In my country, usally 25 years old leave from their parents.

>> In my country, they usually leave their parent's house at the age of 25.

They starts to the work. and then they will alone live in rental house.

>> They start to work. and live alone in a rental house.
In my case, actually, I Independent 20years old.

>> In my case, actually, I started to be independent when I was 20 years old.
since then, I am not receive petty cash from my parents.

>> Since then, I haven't received any cash from my parents.

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