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First, our country is quite serious at the gap between rich, and pool, so pool house is hard to live because there are so many things to buy if they have many children. Also, if the rich house have many children, they become hard, because they are going company, so we only raises one or two children.
Second, economy is not healthy, very wick, and unstable. once house prices is so expensive, so rich people also can't buy this house. This is why Korean rasies 1or 2 child.

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Hi there Maria, good evening!

I asked this question because today, there are only very few South Koreans who bear children or marry because of the high cost of living in your country. Overtime, it has been very difficult to buy a house and raise children because mothers need to work as well.

Anyway, thank you for these reasons. I am glad that at your young age, you have given these examples so you can think about your life in the future.

See you next week, smile with your shiny teeth!

-T. Donna =)

First, our country is quite serious at the gap between rich, and pool, so pool house is hard to live because there are so many things to buy if they have many children. 
>> First, our country is quite serious with the gap between the rich, and the poor. So the poor household lives hard because there are so many things to buy if they have many children. 

Also, if the rich house have many children, they become hard, because they are going company, so we only raises one or two children.
>> Also, if the rich's house has many children, it becomes hard because they are going to have a lot of company. So, we only raise one or two children.

Second, economy is not healthy, very wick, and unstable. once house prices is so expensive, so rich people also can't buy this house. 
>> Second, the economy is not healthy, it's very weak and unstable. Once house prices is so expensive, rich people also can't buy a house. 

This is why Korean rasies 1or 2 child
>> This is why Koreans raise 1 or 2 children.
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