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Adults,especially parents,think
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or whether their children are happy or not

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Hello, Lucia!
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Thank you so much for answering your homework.
Like what I've mention last time, proper punctuation is important when writing paragraphs.
Let's discuss this in class on Monday.
See you then!

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Adults,especially parents,think
that the most worrying thing is the safety of their children
or whether their children are happy or not
>>> Adults, especially parents, think that the biggest concern is their children's safety.
They also worry about their children's happiness.
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