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What makes you interested in playing computer games?
-> Fun activities in computer games made me interested in playing computer games.
First, each computer games have fun activities or interesting stories.
And these things make computer games very interesting to me.
Second, I can spend my time for doing some activities in computer games.
If I feel bored, I can spend my time for doing some activities in computer games.
So fun activities in computer games made me interested in playing computer games.

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Fun activities in computer games made me interested in playing computer games.
>> Fun activities on the computer makes me interested in it. 

First, each computer games have fun activities or interesting stories.
>> First, each computer game has fun activities or interesting stories.

And these things make computer games very interesting to me.
>> These things makes computer games interesting to me. 

Second, I can spend my time for doing some activities in computer games.
>> I can spend most of my time playing games on my computer. 

If I feel bored, I can spend my time for doing some activities in computer games.
>> If I feel bored, I can just easily use my computer to be entertained. 

So fun activities in computer games made me interested in playing computer games.
>> Fun activities make me interested in playing computer games. 
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