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Classical music is not popular these days.
So fewer people prefer classical music and fewer people want to play it.
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Motivation also helps in making you active in life. You will struggle more to fulfill your goals. A self-motivated person always discovers a way to understand the issues hindering the path to complete a task. Moreover, they do not require other people¡¯s support to accomplish a challenging task close to them.
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Classical music is not popular these days.
>>> CORRECT
So fewer people prefer classical music and fewer people want to play it.
>>> CORRECT
Before encouraging people to play classical music they should make sure that more people listen to classical music.
>>> CORRECT
The more listeners they hear, the more people you they will be interested in playing.
>>> The more listeners they have, the interested people will become. 
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