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I agree to a certain extent.
These days, many people think from judeged according to their social status and material possession.
People are inore from the poor, but respect and follow from the rich.
Before, kindness and trust are most important, but now social status and marterial possession are most important.
I don't know why people judge that.
I think the world must change.
Otherwise the world will be ruined.

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Hi there EDEN~! ^^ Thanks for doing your homework smartly. I appreciate your essay ideas. Keep writing and keep learning.^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA 
I agree to a certain extent.
>>> CORRECT
These days, many people think from judeged according to their social status and material possession.
>>> These days, many people judged others according to their social status and material possessions.
People are inore from the poor, but respect and follow from the rich.
>>> People ignore the poor, but respect and follow the rich.
Before, kindness and trust are most important, but now social status and marterial possession are most important.
>>> Before, kindness and trust are most important, but now social status and materials possession are the most important.
I don't know why people judge that.
>>> I don't know why people judge that way.
I think the world must change.
>>> CORRECT
Otherwise the world will be ruined.
>>> CORRECT
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