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My most interesting fish is mini fish.

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I love mini fish and I interest in there, but I don't know about a lot of fishes imformation. Just I know about fish is gold fish, and I love it. I have gold fish in our grandmother's house. My grandmother, and grandfather love fish and also they love plants a lot. Anyway, My most interesting fish is mini fish. This means I know just a gold fish in a lot of fish in the sea, but my favorite and interesting fish are mini fish. Mini fishes are very very many in the sea, They are so cute and so pretty. I want to grow them, but my grandmother and grandfather said: "No, it is so hard to grow them, because they are so many and also we have to buy a lot of food(?)".

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Hello Maria!

Your grandparents are right. If you want to take care of fish, it is a lot of work. On the other hand, they are also a lot of joy when you see them growing healthy and getting more and more.

So someday when you have your own house, maybe you can take care of your favorite mini fish or gold fish.

Thank you for making your essay. I know you are very busy. Take some rest tonight.

See you soon!

-T. Donna =)

I love mini fish and I interest in there, but I don't know about a lot of fishes imformation. 
>> I love mini fish and I am interested in them but I don't know a lot of information about this fish. 

Just I know about fish is gold fish, and I love it. I have gold fish in our grandmother's house. 
>> I just know that this fish is gold and I love it. I have a gold fish in our grandmother's house. 

My grandmother, and grandfather love fish and also they love plants a lot. 
>> Correct!

Anyway, My most interesting fish is mini fish. This means I know just a gold fish in a lot of fish in the sea, but my favorite and interesting fish are mini fish. 
>> Anyway, my most interesting fish is the mini fish. This means I know just the gold fish in a lot of fishes in the sea, but my favorite and interesting fish are the mini fish. 

Mini fishes are very very many in the sea, They are so cute and so pretty. 
>>  Correct!
Or: Mini fishes are very many in the sea. They are so cute and so pretty. 

I want to grow them, but my grandmother and grandfather said: "No, it is so hard to grow them, because they are so many and also we have to buy a lot of food(?)".
>> Correct!
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