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My English teacher in the middle school was not good at speaking English and didn't teach how to speak it. Teachers at that time focused on the importance of grammar so I didn't learn it very well. In Korea, if we want to get a good job, we have to submit score of english test such as TOEIC. People who want to get a job look for how to receive high score. Private institute can provide the best way to get high score with skills without studying proper way. That's why most Koreans can't speak english fluently and I was the one who can't speak it but I wanted to work in abroad. I tried to study english in various ways. Finally, I got a chance to work in the UAE and worked there for three years. After that, I came back to Korea and have felt to eager making many global friends and also want to have another chance to work in advanced countries. So, I have put my effort to learn speaking english.

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My English teacher in the middle school was not good at speaking English and didn't teach how to speak it. 
>>> My English teacher in the middle school was not good at speaking English and didn't teach how to speak well. 
Teachers at that time focused on the importance of grammar so I didn't learn it very well.
>>> CORRECT
 In Korea, if we want to get a good job, we have to submit score of english test such as TOEIC.
>>>  In Korea, if we want to get a good job, we have to submit a score of English tests like TOEIC.
 People who want to get a job look for how to receive high score. 
>>>  People who want to get a job look should know how to get  a high score. 
Private institute can provide the best way to get high score with skills without studying proper way. 
>>> Private institutes can provide the best way to get a high score with skills without studying in a proper way. 
That's why most Koreans can't speak english fluently and I was the one who can't speak it but I wanted to work in abroad.
>>> That's why most Koreans can't speak English fluently and I was the one who couldn't speak it but I wanted to work abroad.
 I tried to study english in various ways. 
>>>  I tried to study English in various ways. 
Finally, I got a chance to work in the UAE and worked there for three years. 
>>> Finally, I got a chance to work in the UAE for three years. 
After that, I came back to Korea and have felt to eager making many global friends and also want to have another chance to work in advanced countries. 
>>> CORRECT
So, I have put my effort to learn speaking English.
>>> CORRECT
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