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Hobbies that need skills can cost a lot of money because they need to learn.
But hobbies that don't need skills cost less money.
Hobbies that do not require skills are easily accessible to people, while those that require skills are not easily accessible to people.
But a hobbies that require skills may have a job later.
I think it would be good to enjoy hobbies that require skills and hobbies that do not require skills at the same time.

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Hi there Eden~! ^^ I didn't see you today! I hope you're fine! Have a great weekend!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA 
Hobbies that need skills can cost a lot of money because they need to learn.
>>> CORRECT
But hobbies that don't need skills cost less money.
>>> CORRECT
Hobbies that do not require skills are easily accessible to people, while those that require skills are not easily accessible to people.
>>> CORRECT
But a hobbies that require skills may have a job later.
>>> A hobby that requires skills may have a job later.
I think it would be good to enjoy hobbies that require skills and hobbies that do not require skills at the same time.
>>> I think it would be better to enjoy hobbies that require skills and hobbies that do not require skills at the same time.
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