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What is the biggest change this world needs?
I think we have to think our own thinking, and we have to get ability that we can talk our opinion.
Because some of the part of the social is wrong, but we just pass it and just live our life.
Even though, some poeple know some part of the social is wrong, but they just pass it.
So I think we have to get our own opinion, and we have to get ability that we can talk our opinion.
We need this change, and if we do this, the world can be change better before.

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Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think we have to think our own thinking, and we have to get ability that we can talk our opinion.
>> I think we have to have the voice for our opinions. 

Because some of the part of the social is wrong, but we just pass it and just live our life.
>> Because every time that we see something wrong, we just let it pass and move on with our lives.
 
Even though, some poeple know some part of the social is wrong, but they just pass it.
>> SAME SENTENCE AS ABOVE

So I think we have to get our own opinion, and we have to get ability that we can talk our opinion.
>> That's why I think we have to have the voice for our opinions. 

We need this change, and if we do this, the world can be change better before.
>> We need to change this and if so, the world will be a better place. 
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