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New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers.

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To many people, new technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers is a number of debate. There are, however, several strong arguments for and against it. In this essay, I will discuss this statement before offering my own opinion.

There are a number of reasons why New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers.
Firstly, the development of the smartphone is the greatest innovation of technology because people can get information everywhere that they want to. Secondly, there were made many shopping malls on the internet, it is also changing our whole life as people can buying and selling the products easily anywhere, anytime.

To sum up, new technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. Also, it will change people's lives in the future in good ways.

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Good evening Andy. Nice ideas! ^_^
T. Irene
To many people, new technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers is a number of debate. 
>>> To many people, new technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers is a good subject for debate. 
There are, however, several strong arguments for and against it. 
>>> Correct. 
OR
>>> There are several strong arguments for and against it. 
In this essay, I will discuss this statement before offering my own opinion.
>>> In this essay, I will discuss these  points before offering my own opinion.
There are a number of reasons why new technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers.
>>> Correct. 
Firstly, the development of the smartphone is the greatest innovation of technology because people can get information everywhere that they want to. 
>>> Firstly, the development of the smartphone is the greatest innovation in technology because people can get information everywhere  when they want to. 
Secondly, there were made many shopping malls on the internet, it is also changing our whole life as people can buying and selling the products easily anywhere, anytime.
>>> Secondly, there are many shopping malls on the internet, it is also changing our whole life as it allows us to buy and sell products easily anywhere and anytime.
To sum up, new technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. 
>>> Correct. 
Also, it will change people's lives in the future in good ways.
>>> It will also change people's lives in the future in good ways.

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