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How can the public transportation in your city be improved?

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I live in major city so I can easily go to anywhere by using public transportation. but If it's possible that the public transportation can be more good. If the term of bus or train is decreased, It's more convinient. but It's impossible to decrease time. because public transportation always makes a lose every year. I am satisfied to this.

ps. sorry. last friday is the holiday of institute. so I really thought that day is saturday. I don't know why. there's no excuse.. It's my fault. I'm very sorry..

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Hi Tobby! These are all good ways to improve a city's public transportation because it is an essential for the economies growth. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

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I live in major city so I can easily go to anywhere by using public transportation. 
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but If it's possible that the public transportation can be more good.
>> If it's possible that the public transportation then that would be better. 

 If the term of bus or train is decreased, It's more convinient. but It's impossible to decrease time. 
>> If the number of bus ant trains would increase, that would be more convenient but I think it won't be possible now.  

because public transportation always makes a lose every year. I am satisfied to this.
>> Even though public transportation decreases every year, I am still satisfied. 

ps. sorry. last friday is the holiday of institute. so I really thought that day is saturday. I don't know why. there's no excuse.. It's my fault. I'm very sorry..
>>Sorry about last Friday because it was a holiday in our school and I thought that it was already Saturday. There was no excuse. It's my fault and I'm very sorry. 
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