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Describe an unexpected event that you had.

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I think that I met many unexpected moments while I have been living. I can not remember everything, but one experience rrmains deeply inside me. When I was high school student I usually went to achool by bus. In Korea, most high school students study hard, sometimes they finish their study at late night me either. On the way home by bus, I was in a sleep. When I woke up to get off the bus the man's hand was on my thigh. He waa sitting next to me. I was so fightened and got off the bes immediately. After that day, I couldn't sit in backside of the bus at night.

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Good afternoon Young Won!

This is quite an experience. I hope that this is only one of those creative thinking but then, I think that this is a true experience. It can be traumatic. It also means that you were very beautiful when you were young. Well, lessons learned. Thanks for sharing this in this composition.

See you in class in a few.

-T. Donna =)

I think that I met many unexpected moments while I have been living. 
>> Correct!

I can not remember everything, but one experience rrmains deeply inside me. 
>> Correct!
Or: remains (SPELLING)

When I was high school student I usually went to achool by bus. 
>> When I was a high school student, I usually went to school by bus. 

In Korea, most high school students study hard, sometimes they finish their study at late night me either. 
>> Correct!
Or: In Korea, most high school students study hard, sometimes they finish their study at late night, me either. 

On the way home by bus, I was in a sleep. When I woke up to get off the bus the man's hand was on my thigh. 
>> On the way home by bus, I was asleep. When I woke up to get off the bus, a man's hand was on my thigh. 

He waa sitting next to me. I was so fightened and got off the bes immediately. 
>> Correct!
Or: SPELLING: He was sitting next to me. I was so frightened and got off the bus immediately. 

After that day, I couldn't sit in backside of the bus at night.
>> After that day, I never sat at the backside of the bus at night.
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