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computer game is not good for children

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I think computer game is not good for children.
First reason, If they play computer game. They can fall into games. And they only want to play computer games. Also they poor social powers.
The second reason, If children plays many time on computer game they don't want to stop games so they don't listen to his mother spiking.So his personality becomes grotesque.
That's the reason why I think computer game is not good for children.

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Hello Jed. Thank you for this. For these reasons you mentioned, I hope you don't pay too much computer games then.
- T. Beth
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I think computer game is not good for children.
>>>    correct
First reason, If they play computer game. 
They can fall into games. And they only want to play computer games. 
>>> The first reason is, if they play computer games they can get addicted and they would only want to keep playing computer games.
Also they poor social powers.
>>Also, they would have poor social skills.    
The second reason, If children plays many time on computer game they don't want to stop games so they don't listen to his mother spiking.
>>> The second reason, if children play computer game for a long time, they wouldn't want to stop so they won't listen to their mother speaking.   
So his personality becomes grotesque.
>>> Their personality become grotesque.   
That's the reason why I think computer game is not good for children.
>>>  correct  
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