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Do you believe in life after death? Why or Why not?

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I'm going to church every Sunday. I believe God and I believe Jesus too. And we can find lots of things about after death in Holy Bible.
But I can't believe about after death. I believed after death when I was young. But now, I know about lots of things.
And I can't assure about after death. If we hear or see about dimention theory, there is about 4-dimention.
According to the dimention theory, the time, is just one axis such as X-axis, Y-axis, and Z-axis.
And 3-dimentional creature, human can see only 3-dimentional things. It means we can see only section of 4-dimention.
And in the 4-dimention, the time of 3-dimention is just one thing like apple. And it is shaped.
So we are thinking that time goes by, but time isn't going. We just made the time to understand 4-dimention more easly.
So past, prasent, and future is happening at the same time. That's why I can't assure about after death.

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Hi John! Life after death is called "Heaven". Some people believe in it and some don't. It actually depends on your faith. Our perspectives are different from another. Thanks for sharing yours :) 

PS: I learned a lot from your answer. Thanks for that :) 

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I'm going to church every Sunday. 
>> I go to church every Sunday. 

I believe God and I believe Jesus too. 
>> I believe in God and Jesus too. 

And we can find lots of things about after death in Holy Bible.
>> We can read a lot of things about the after lifer in the Holy Bible. 

But I can't believe about after death. 
>>Despite that, I still don't believe in life after death. 

I believed after death when I was young. 
>> I used to believe it when I was young. 

But now, I know about lots of things.
>> But now I know a lot of things. 

And I can't assure about after death. 
>> I haven't assured if there is life after death. 

If we hear or see about dimention theory, there is about 4-dimention.
>> If we know about the different dimensions, there are only 4 of them. 

According to the dimention theory, the time, is just one axis such as X-axis, Y-axis, and Z-axis.
>> According to the Dimentsion Theory, time is just one axis such as the X-axis, Y-axis and Z-axis. 

And 3-dimentional creature, human can see only 3-dimentional things. It means we can see only section of 4-dimention.
>> # dimentional creatures, like humans, can only see 3-dimentional things. It means we can only see a section of the 4th dimension. 

And in the 4-dimention, the time of 3-dimention is just one thing like apple. And it is shaped.
>> In the 4th dimension, time in the 3rd dimension is just like an apple. It has a shape. 

So we are thinking that time goes by, but time isn't going. We just made the time to understand 4-dimention more easly.
>> So we think that time just passes by but it doesn't. We just made the concept of time to understand the 4th dimension. 

So past, prasent, and future is happening at the same time. That's why I can't assure about after death.
>> So, the past, present and future is happening at the same time. That's why I can't assure if there is life after death. 
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