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Do you think sending your loved ones to nursing homes is a kind of abandonment? Why or why not?

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Do you think sending your loved ones to nursing homes is a kind of abandonment? Why or why not?

I don't think so.
They have no choice to send to nursing homes.
It is not abandomment or bothersome.
Most of couples have a their job, they can't afford to take care of their family.
Theseday. nursing home is good well, many people is used it.

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Hi MonicaThe reasons articulated by families for transferring their loved ones to nursing homes include the need for higher professional care, health care , behaviors associated with dementia and the need for more assistance. Some people agree with this method and some don't. Regardless of so, we should know the story first before judging these families. :) 

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I don't think so.
>> CORRECT

They have no choice to send to nursing homes.
>>They have no choice but tot send them in a nursing home. 

It is not abandomment or bothersome.
>> It is not abandonment or should cause bothersome.

Most of couples have a their job, they can't afford to take care of their family.
>> Most of couples have a their job and they can't afford to take care of their family.

Theseday. nursing home is good well, many people is used it.
>> These days, nursing homes are good and many people rely on it. 
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