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What do most people do during Buddha\'s birthday there in Korea?

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Most people play with their friends or family, or just rest in a house during Buddha's birthday in my country, Korea.
I think some of people are going to go to temple because of their religious.
In the past, their was lots of people who are believing Buddha, but now, in Korea, their are lots of Christians.
So we don't have anything to do.
Some of my friends said they have academies to go to, but I don't have any academies during Buddha's birthday.
So including me, most people play with their friends or family, or just rest in a house during Buddha's birthday in Korea.

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Hi DanielGenerally, holidays are intended to allow individuals to celebrate or commemorate an event or tradition of cultural or religious significance. Some people celebrate it and some don't but everyone can enjoy it by how they want. It's a time of relaxation so people are usually happy during these times. 

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Most people play with their friends or family, or just rest in a house during Buddha's birthday in my country, Korea.
>>> Most people play with their friends and family or just rest in their houses during Buddha's birthday in Korea. 

I think some of people are going to go to temple because of their religious.
>>
I think some of people are going to go to temple because of their religion. 

In the past, their was lots of people who are believing Buddha, but now, in Korea, their are lots of Christians.
>> In the past, there were lots of people who believe in Buddha but now, in Korea, there are lots of Christians.

So we don't have anything to do.
>> CORRECT

Some of my friends said they have academies to go to, but I don't have any academies during Buddha's birthday.
>> Some of my friends said that they need to go to their academies but I don't have to since it's a holiday. 

So including me, most people play with their friends or family, or just rest in a house during Buddha's birthday in Korea.
>> So including me, most people play with their friends an family or just rest in their houses during Buddha's birthday in Korea.
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