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What was the most memorable vacation that you had with your family?

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When I was 14years old. My family went to the valley, I forgot that valley is where area. My family traveled From morning to evening, arrived at the valley in evening, my father set up a tent nexy together ate meat. I don¡¯t forget the day mood. I feel so happy.

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What was the most memorable vacation that you had with your family?


When I was 14years old. My family went to the valley, I forgot that valley is where area. 
>>> When I was 14 years old, my family went to a valley but I forgot where the valley is located. 

My family traveled From morning to evening, arrived at the valley in evening, my father set up a tent nexy together ate meat. 
>>> My family traveled from morning to evening, and we arrived at the valley in the evening. My father set up a tent and together we ate meat. 

I don¡¯t forget the day mood. I feel so happy.
>>> I will never forget the mood of that day. I felt so happy that day. 
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