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How do you think can the rich countries help the poor countries?

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I think rich countries help the poor countries not essential in democracy but each others helps so good. but when poor countries is given the help need so many effort. because rich countries can not forever help the poor countries.

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Hi Won! ^^

Your answer is a good point. That's actually a good solution but I think a lot of people would be against this because their hard earned money will be offered to other people. :) 

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I think rich countries help the poor countries not essential in democracy but each others helps so good. 
>> I think rich countries helping poor countries is not essential in democracy although it would be a good help. 

but when poor countries is given the help need so many effort. 
>> When rich countries help poor countries it would require a lot of effort. 

because rich countries can not forever help the poor countries.
>> Rich countries can't help the poop countries forever. 
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