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If you are going to make a song, what would it be about and who are you dedicating it to? Explain yo

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If I am going to make a song, I think it will be about my life and I want to put my experience and about its feeling to the lyrics.
Because I am interesting about hip hop music and usually almost artist put their experiences to their lyrics of music.
And also some hip hop artists put their minds about their experiences to their lyrics, and my favorite hip hop artist does that.
So if I am going to make a song, I think it will be about my life and I want to put my experience and about its feeling to the lyrics.

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That's a great answer! This can really uplift your and other people's spirits. :) 

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If I am going to make a song, I think it will be about my life and I want to put my experience and about its feeling to the lyrics.
>>If I am going to make a song, I think it will be about my life and I want to put my experience. 

Because I am interesting about hip hop music and usually almost artist put their experiences to their lyrics of music.
>>  I am interested in hip hop music and usually almost artist put their experiences to their lyrics. 

And also some hip hop artists put their minds about their experiences to their lyrics, and my favorite hip hop artist does that.
>>Also, some hip hop artists put thoughts to their lyrics. My favorite hip hop artist does that.

So if I am going to make a song, I think it will be about my life and I want to put my experience and about its feeling to the lyrics.
>>So if I am going to make a song, I think it will be about my life and I want to put my experience in it as well. 

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