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What do you do if someone grabs your purse or backpack?

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I won't shout out to the person who grabs my purse or backpack and call the police right away.
Because there are so many strange and dangerous people who can try to hurt or kill me.
So I will not shout out to that person.
Instead, I am going to call the police to get some helps to get back my purse or backpack again.

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Hello Christine!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I won't shout out to the person who grabs my purse or backpack and call the police right away.

>> I won't shout at the person who grabs my purse or backpack and I will call the police right away.
Because there are so many strange and dangerous people who can try to hurt or kill me. 
So I will not shout out to that person.

>> There are so many strange and dangerous people who can try to hurt or kill me, that's why I will not shout at that person.

Instead, I am going to call the police to get some helps to get back my purse or backpack again.

>> Instead I am going to call the police to get some help in getting back my purse or backpack.

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