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How do you think can the culture in Korea be preserved for many generations to come?

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It is good to accept other countries' cultures but I think Korea is accepting too many cultures.
In the past, a lot of Korean lived in tile-roofed houses but now most of Korean don't live in tile-roofed houses.
Of course the culture can be changed by the country's people but if the country want to preserve their culture, they have to live in the culture.
So I think if Korea wants to preserve Korean's culture, Korean have to live in the culture.

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Hi John! ^^

The best way to preserve your culture is to keep it alive. Gather as a group not just for holidays, but for ordinary meals, events, or just conversation. Many aspects of culture are difficult to learn in books and museums, including etiquette, body language, and humor.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

It is good to accept other countries' cultures but I think Korea is accepting too many cultures.
>> It is a good to accept other country's cultures but I think Korea is accepting too much.

In the past, a lot of Korean lived in tile-roofed houses but now most of Korean don't live in tile-roofed houses.
>>In the past, a lot of Korean lived in tile-roofed houses but now, most of Koreans don't live in tile-roofed houses anymore. 

Of course the culture can be changed by the country's people but if the country want to preserve their culture, they have to live in the culture.
>>Of course, culture can be changed by the country's people but if the country wants to preserve their culture, they have to live with it.

So I think if Korea wants to preserve Korean's culture, Korean have to live in the culture.
>>So if Korean want to preserve Korea's culture, they have to live with it everyday. 
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