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What do you think should the government about the homeless people on the streets?

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What do you think should the government about the homeless people on the streets?

Government helps the homeless people on the streets.
At present, government is supported the homeless.
Government is provided shelter and work to the homeless for geting back on their feet.
But, most of the homeless is still lived on the streets.

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Hi Monica! ^^

There¡¯s never a good time to lack shelter, but the return of cold weather presents particular challenges for people experiencing homelessness. The sight of someone on the street in fall and winter compels us to make an effort to help. But it can be difficult to know how to make the greatest impact. Your suggestion is great!

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Government helps the homeless people on the streets.
>> The government should help the homeless people on the street. 

At present, government is supported the homeless.
>> As of now, the government is already doing it. 

Government is provided shelter and work to the homeless for geting back on their feet.
>> They have provided shelter and work for the homeless for them to get back on their feet. 

But, most of the homeless is still lived on the streets.
>> But, most of the homeless still live on the streets.

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