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As advanced social situation,people can be contacted with others on line.
And personal life is more importance than the group or family .
They enjoy playing games alone,hobby too. So they don't might need to meet anyone in an age of nuclear family

Parent generation lived big family members through communication always .
Nowadays they feel better on line. That is just my opinion.
I think culture can be changed more and more in the future.
we would try to hold our good relationship in the big family.
But we have to accept the situation even though missing the past.

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Good evening ma'am. Thank you for finding the time to share your thoughts and opinion about this topic.  ^_^
T. Irene
As advanced social situation, people can be contacted with others on line.
>>> With the advancing technology, people can now easily contact each other online. 
And personal life is more importance than the group or family .
>>> And personal life has become more important than family relationships.
They enjoy playing games alone,hobby too. So they don't might need to meet anyone in an age of nuclear family
>>> People can now enjoy playing games alone or doing their hobby by themselves so they don't really need to be with others in this age of nuclear families. 
Parent generation lived big family members through communication always .
>>> In our parent's generation, there were big families that need to communicate constantly. 
Nowadays they feel better on line. That is just my opinion.
>>> My personal opinion is that people feel better in communication using current technologies. 
I think culture can be changed more and more in the future.
>>> I think culture may change a lot in the future. 
we would try to hold our good relationship in the big family.
>>> We would still try to maintain good relationships in the family. 
But we have to accept the situation even though missing the past.
>>>   But we have to accept the current situation although we may still miss a part of the past. 
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