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It was my elementary school teacher because he made me to fix my bad habit. He is the best teacher who I know.

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Hi Kane! ^^
 
There are certain people in our lives that has made a great impact in our lives. Most of them come from our childhood. We wouldn't be who we are today without their help. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

It was my elementary school teacher because he made me to fix my bad habit. 
>> It was my elementary school teacher because he made me fix my bad habit. 

He is the best teacher who I know.
>> He is the best teacher I know. 
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