¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Is it better to be a teenager today or during your time?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*ȯ
2021-09-09 565

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

If I have a chance to choose childhood of mine or my son's, I would choose my son's childhood. My time was hard to live. That time my parents didn't know how to support their children, and they didn't have enough money to support us. So, they had pushed me to study hard, but they didn't know why do I study hard. Of course, I didn't know. But now, I know why do people study hard. I have explained about it to my son.(Even if people know the reason of studying, people hate to study.) I have shown the world to my son. My son will have a big dream than me.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi Hwanny, 
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with me. Your children are lucky to have a father like you :) 
See you next week. Have a nice weekend! 
Regards,
T. Angelica 
If I have a chance to choose childhood of mine or my son's, I would choose my son's childhood. 
>>If I had a chance to choose between my childhood or my son's, I would choose my son's childhood. 
My time was hard to live. 
>> It was hard to live during my time. 
That time my parents didn't know how to support their children, and they didn't have enough money to support us. 
>> During those times, my parents didn't know how to support their children and they didn't have enough money to support us. 
So, they had pushed me to study hard, but they didn't know why do I study hard. 
>> So, they had pushed me to study hard but they didn't know why I had to study hard. 
Of course, I didn't know. But now, I know why do people study hard. 
>>Of course, I didn't know. But now, I understand why people study hard. 
I have explained about it to my son.(Even if people know the reason of studying, people hate to study.) 
>>I have explained this to my son. (Even if people know the importance of studying, people still hate to study.) 
OR>>I have talked about it to my son. 
I have shown the world to my son. 
>> CORRECT
My son will have a big dream than me.
>>My son will be able to dream bigger than me. 
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
113876 homework Á¤*È£ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 0
113875 Homework {11/15} Â÷*ºó ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 309
113874 Kindly explain your family in your own words. Make at least 6 or... ·ù*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 381
113873 Monday homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 317
113872 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 2
113871 Homework ¹Ú*¸® ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 323
113870 Black sheep ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 457
113869 Homework ¹Ú*¸® ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 392
113868 Homework °­*¼± ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 441
113867 Homework ¹Ú*¸® ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 638
113866 Homework À±*ÀÓ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 359
113865 Homework ¹Ú*¸® ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 618
113864 e-mail correction ¹Ú*±¤ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 3
113863 My teachers ±â*Çö ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 374
113862 What did you do last weekend? ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 469
113861 Why do you think couples do not have children in your country... ¹®*À² ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 396
113860 Homework ±è*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 444
113859 What wishes do you have for your family members? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 369
113858 Homework ¹æ*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 278
113857 How do you think you could reduce stress or prevent stress in... ÀÌ*Çö ¿Ï·á 2021-11-15 304

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04