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There are two questions in the pile about the previous revised writing. thank you~~

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Thank you for the questions, Shin!

The ones in black are my comments and direct answers to your questions and those in red are the revisions. 

I hope your questions are answered. ^^ 

~Elica~

There are a lot of the website that I have used, but the first website that comes to mind is ¡®Mushinsa¡¯, which is online shopping mall for fashion items.

>>There are a lot of websites that I have used, but the first website that comes to mind is ¡®Mushinsa¡¯, which is an online shopping mall for fashion items.

 

I bought many items such as glasses, pants, jeans, and shirts. 

>>CORRECT

The favorite item of them that I bought from the website is duck-down coat because It¡¯s a great coat that is long enough to cover my knee and the most expensive one of the items that I have.

>> My most favorite item among them that I bought from the website is a duck-down coat because it¡¯s a great coat that is long enough to cover my knee and the most expensive one of the items that I have.

 

 In fact, I don¡¯t prefer to buy something from website because I can¡¯t see real size and it might be broken on the delivery.

>>Actually, I don¡¯t prefer to buy something online because I can¡¯t see the real size and it might be broken on the delivery. 

 However, I haven¡¯t been disappointed by any items that I ordered from the website. 

>>However, I haven¡¯t been disappointed by any of the items that I ordered from the website. 

There are a lot of comments and pictures from buyers/shoppers on the website.

>>CORRECT

OR

>>There are also a lot of comments and pictures from buyers/shoppers on the website.

 

 There are several things that I like the website. 

>> There are several things that I like about the website.

First, as I said, there are a lot of comments and pictures that come from buyers and I can tell what size is fit to me. 

>> First, as I said, there are a lot of comments and pictures that come from the buyers and I can tell what size is fit for me

Second, there are diverse items and brands on the website. 

>>CORRECT

Moreover, the items are generally cheap because of the competition of many brands. 

>>CORRECT

Lastly, the delivery takes only 2days and the fee is free.

>>CORRECT

 

Q) it¡¯s better to interact with peers, sharing my ideas because we can produce more creative ideas 

>>It¡¯s better to interact with peers, sharing my ideas because we can produce more creative ideas.

but after that, it¡¯s better to interact with peers, sharing my ideas because we can produce more creative ideas.

>>After that, it¡¯s better to interact with peers and share my ideas because we can produce more creative ideas.

Which sentence is right? ~~~with peers and share my~~/ ~~with peers, sharing my ~~

Both two sentences are good?

>>This one is better "After that, it¡¯s better to interact with peers and share my ideas because we can produce more creative ideas." It's because it sounds more parallel and forms a more concrete idea. Also avoid starting your sentence with "but". 

 

Q) When it comes to the sales of Fairtrade-labelled banana, likewise, surges were seen in UK and Switzerland. 

>>When it comes to the sales of Fairtrade-labelled bananas, likewise, surges were seen in UK and Switzerland.

In the sentence that you revised, is ¡®in the UK¡¯ right? You revised from ¡®in UK¡¯ to ¡®in the UK¡¯ in the other sentences.  

>>Yes, it should be "the UK". ( If the country name is common nouns, use the - the Czech Republic, the United Kingdom. If it is a group of islands, use the - the Bahamas, the Maldives, the Philippines. If the name is common nouns followed by 'of', use the - the United States of America, the Peoples Republic of China.)

 

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