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First, I need the help of a babysitter because I take care of the baby with my husband everyday without rest. But now is COVID seriously. So it's hard to ask for help to take care of my baby.
Second, I really need help to improve my English. Even though I live in the USA, I hardly meet Americans. Because of the Pandemic now. Thus, I virtually take an English class.
Third, I need God's grace. I can not live without Jesus. During the hard time, I try to focus on God's words. I could discover my sins and realize my spiritual seat at this time. Even though we have a tough time with the pandemic now, I won't stop struggling to find God's will in my life. I don't want to waste my life. I hope my spiritual things grow up with Jesus everyday.
And I need a prayer partner. God will send me people I need. I trust that God already knows my needs. I just will do my best to people and environments around me that God allows me through prayer now. During this time, God is working for me!
Thanks!

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I just want to say Amen and Amen to that, Jane! Indeed, you are a work in progress. Have a good day! Thank you so much!-Faith-
First, I need the help of a babysitter because I take care of the baby with my husband everyday without rest. 
>> First, I need the help of a babysitter because I take care of my baby with my husband every day without rest. 
But now is COVID seriously. So it's hard to ask for help to take care of my baby.
>> But now COVID is serious, so it's hard to ask for help to take care of my baby.
Second, I really need help to improve my English. 
>> CORRECT
Even though I live in the USA, I hardly meet Americans. Because of the Pandemic now.
>> Even though I reside in the USA, I rarely meet Americans because of the pandemic now.
 Thus, I virtually take an English class.
>> CORRECT
OR As a result, I take online English classes.
Third, I need God's grace. 
>> CORRECT
I can not live without Jesus. 
>> I cannot live without Jesus.
During the hard time, I try to focus on God's words. 
>> During the hard time, I try to focus on God's Words. 
I could discover my sins and realize my spiritual seat at this time. 
>> CORRECT 
OR I could find my sins and reflect on my spiritual condition these days.
Even though we have a tough time with the pandemic now, I won't stop struggling to find God's will in my life.
>> CORRECT
I don't want to waste my life. 
>> CORRECT
I hope my spiritual things grow up with Jesus everyday.
>> I hope my spiritual things grow up with Jesus every day.
And I need a prayer partner. 
>> CORRECT
OR I also need a prayer partner.
God will send me people I need. 
>> CORRECT
I trust that God already knows my needs. 
>> CORRECT
I just will do my best to people and environments around me that God allows me through prayer now. 
>> I just will do my best to people and my environment that God allows me to help through prayers now. 
During this time, God is working for me!
>> CORRECT
Thanks!
>> CORRECT
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