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Why is English fluency significant for you?

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There are several reasons why English fluency is significant for me. First of all, it is important to convey my opinions and thoughts when i communicate with foringers so that it would prevent to make misunderstanding. For instance, when i work at the hospital as an international nursing student, i should speak in English fluently with medical teams and patients to avoid medical accidents such as administering wrong drugs and providing inappropriate treatment. Moreover, speaking English fluently provides a wide range of opportunities to get a job in abroad. Even if person can communicate with others using simple sentences and words, most of companiess require employees who can communicate perfectly with clients and other companiess to achieve their goals. Therefore, English fluency plays an important role for my future work.

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Thank you for this Kasey!

There are several reasons why English fluency is significant for me. 
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First of all, it is important to convey my opinions and thoughts when i communicate with foringers so that it would prevent to make misunderstanding. 
>>> First of all, it is important to convey my opinions and thoughts when I communicate with foreigners to prevent making a misunderstanding.    
For instance, when i work at the hospital as an international nursing student, i should speak in English fluently with medical teams and patients to avoid medical accidents such as administering wrong drugs and providing inappropriate treatment. 
>>> For instance, when I work at the hospital as an international nursing student, I should speak in English fluently with medical teams and patients to avoid medical accidents such as administering wrong drugs and providing inappropriate treatment.   
Moreover, speaking English fluently provides a wide range of opportunities to get a job in abroad. 
>>> Moreover, speaking English fluently provides a wide range of opportunities to get a job abroad.  
Even if person can communicate with others using simple sentences and words, most of companiess require employees who can communicate perfectly with clients and other companiess to achieve their goals. 
>>> Even if a person can communicate with others using simple sentences and words, most of companies require employees who can communicate perfectly with clients and other companies to achieve their goals.   
Therefore, English fluency plays an important role for my future work.
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