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What do you think is the biggest problem your country is facing right now? Explain your answer.

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Nowadays, there are also a lot of problems about this pandemic but in South Korea, there are some problems about DEF.
Every car needs DEF for moving and South Korea is getting DEF from China.
But I don't know the reason but we can't recieve DEF from China now.
So South Korea is going to recieve it from Australlia but it is very big problem to a lot of people living in South Korea.
And I think we can have vaccine of Covid19 so I think we don't have to worry about the pandemic that much.
I think the worst problem nowadays is the problem about DEF from China.

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Hi John:)

What it the meaning of DEF? Please explain it to me on our next class together. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Nowadays, there are also a lot of problems about this pandemic but in South Korea, there are some problems about DEF.
>> Nowadays, there are  a lot of problems due to the pandemic all over the world but in South Korea, there are some problems about DEF.

Every car needs DEF for moving and South Korea is getting DEF from China.
>> Every car needs DEF for moving and South Korea gets it from China. 

But I don't know the reason but we can't recieve DEF from China now.
>> I don't know the reason but we can't receive the DEF from China now.

So South Korea is going to recieve it from Australlia but it is very big problem to a lot of people living in South Korea.
>> So South Korea is going to receive it from Australia instead. The main problem is a lot of people live in South Korea. 

And I think we can have vaccine of Covid19 so I think we don't have to worry about the pandemic that much.
>> I also think we can have vaccine of Covid-19 so I think we don't have to worry about the pandemic that much.

I think the worst problem nowadays is the problem about DEF from China.
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