¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

If you can change one of your personalities, what would it be and why?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ·ù*ÁÖ
2021-11-30 1319

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Actually, I don't want to change my personalities.
Before, I thought that some of my personalities are bad so I have to change them.
But now, I think I fixed some of them, and I think that my personalities are great so I don't need to change them.
I made a lot of friends because of my personalities, so I don't need to change my personalities.
What I have to do is keep my personalities and love my self.
Also I think the attitude that loving our personalities is very important in our lives.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi John :) 

That's true. Our personality defines who we are so we have to accept it. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

Actually, I don't want to change my personalities.
>> CORRECT

Before, I thought that some of my personalities are bad so I have to change them.
>> CORRECT

But now, I think I fixed some of them, and I think that my personalities are great so I don't need to change them.
>> CORRECT

I made a lot of friends because of my personalities, so I don't need to change my personalities.
>> I made a lot of friends because of my personalities so I don't need to change them. 

What I have to do is keep my personalities and love my self.
>>  CORRECT

Also I think the attitude that loving our personalities is very important in our lives.
>> I also think that loving our personalities is very important in our lives. 
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
117566 Do you believe that dreams can sometimes predict the future? Why... ½Å*ÈÄ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 1218
117565 What keeps you awake at night sometimes? ÀÌ*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 1265
117564 Writing correction ±è*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 0
117563 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 1
117562 writing ±è*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 0
117561 homework °¨*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 0
117560 homework °¨*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 0
117559 homework °¨*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 1
117558 Homework ±è*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 1138
117557 If you can learn another language, what would it be and why? ¿©*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 0
117556 Do you want to change something in your appearance? Why or why... ÀÌ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 812
117555 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 1
117554 Monday homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 884
117553 My grandchild ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 0
117552 For you, what language is difficult to learn? Why? ¿À*ºó ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 1504
117551 Homework ±â*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 883
117550 About captive animals. ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 815
117549 homework ÀÌ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 932
117548 English ÃÖ*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 1113
117547 What is the worst experience you¡¯ve had on public... ½Å*ÈÄ ¿Ï·á 2022-03-21 1380

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04