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Life without holidays will be awful

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I think life without holidays will be awful. Though we can live without holidays, that life without holidays will be very bored. My father said, when he was 30, there was no holidays, and he could just rest in Sun day. Even that Sun day, he couldn't rest every weeks. He could just rest second week Sun day. He said it was very boring. He couldn't go to travel, and he couldn't talk and discipline with his family. It caused many family problem. In conclusion, holiday is not vital, but it's good for our lives.

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Hi, Daniel! Thank you for doing your homework.  You have delivered your ideas in an orderly way. Great job! However, please be careful with spelling and word usage. 


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I think life without holidays will be awful. 
>> I think life without holidays would be awful. 

Though we can live without holidays, that life without holidays will be very bored. 
>> Though we could live without holidays, life without them would be very boring. 

My father said, when he was 30, there was no holidays, and he could just rest in Sun day. 
>> My father said that when he was 30, there were no holidays, and he could just rest on Sundays. 

Even that Sun day, he couldn't rest every weeks.
>> He couldn't even have a break every Sunday.

He could just rest second week Sun day.
>> He could just relax every second Sunday. 

He said it was very boring.
>> This is a good sentence.

He couldn't go to travel, and he couldn't talk and discipline with his family. 
>> He couldn't travel, and he couldn't talk and bond with his family. 

It caused many family problem.
>> It caused many family problems.

 In conclusion, holiday is not vital, but it's good for our lives.
>> In conclusion, a holiday is not vital, but it's good for our lives.
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