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Is restaurant food better than home-cooked food? Why do you say so?

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First, of food ingredients.
Sometimes there are restaurants that use not fresh or cheap ingredients to make to make more profits. However, if you eat at home, you don't have to worry about the quality of the ingredients. In this respect, home-cooked food may be better. Of course, there are many restaurants that use good ingredients like at home. However, in this case, it costs me a lot that it can be burdendsome financially.

Second, of taste.
Usually, people who run restaurants have their own confidentail recipes which have been developed for a very long time, so it can taste better than home-cooked meal. Some restaurants are incomparably delicious compared to home food because recipes have been inherited and developed through generation to generation. If you want something special on the weekend, it would be good to visit a nearby good restaurant.

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Hi, Steve! Thank you for an impressive work. You made good sentences. Keep it up!  Please be careful with your spelling though. 

- Debbie


First, of food ingredients.
>> First, let me write about the ingredients.

Sometimes there are restaurants that use not fresh or cheap ingredients to make to make more profits. 
>> Some restaurants don't use fresh ingredients, and some use cheap ingredients to make more profits.

However, if you eat at home, you don't have to worry about the quality of the ingredients. 
>> This is a good sentence

In this respect, home-cooked food may be better.
>> This is a good sentence 

Of course, there are many restaurants that use good ingredients like at home. 
>> >> This is a good sentence 

However, in this case, it costs me a lot that it can be burdendsome financially.
>> However, they cost a lot that it can be burdensome financially.

Second, of taste.
>> Second, let me write about the taste.

Usually, people who run restaurants have their own confidentail recipes which have been developed for a very long time, so it can taste better than home-cooked meal. 
>> Usually, people who run restaurants have secret recipes, which they developed for a very long time to taste better than home-cooked meals. 

Some restaurants are incomparably delicious compared to home food because recipes have been inherited and developed through generation to generation
>> Some restaurants are incomparably delicious compared to home food because their recipes were inherited and developed from generation to generation. 

If you want something special on the weekend, it would be good to visit a nearby good restaurant.
>> If you want something special on the weekend, it would be good to visit a nearby restaurant.
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