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Spring:The Season of Life and hope

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It is hard for me to say It's spring that is the most beautiful season (since I prefer winter), but It is. Before spring, a lot of lifes have hard time with cold weather. When spring comes, for those who passed through painful time comes out to the world and prepare to start their dance of life. This feels like a story of hope to me. For this reason, spring is the most beautiful season.

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Hello Justine!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


It is hard for me to say It's spring that is the most beautiful season (since I prefer winter), but It is. 

>> It is hard for me to say that spring is the most beautiful season, since I prefer winter, but it is. 

Before spring, a lot of lifes have hard time with cold weather. 

>> Before spring, a lot of lives go through a hard time with cold weather. 

When spring comes, for those who passed through painful time comes out to the world and prepare to start their dance of life. 

>> When spring comes, for those who went through painful times, comes out into the world and prepare to start their new dance of life. 

This feels like a story of hope to me. 

>> CORRECT!

For this reason, spring is the most beautiful season.

>> CORRECT!

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