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If you can live in another city in South Korea, which one will you pick and why?

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I will pick Busan because in Busan, I can see the sea. I'm living in the small town which be surrounded by the mountains. So, I miss the sea. At the sea, I want to see various kinds of sea creatures like crab. Most of all, I want to see the landscape of peaceful sea. Due to these reasons,  I will pick Busan. / My second pick is Seoul because Seoul is South Korean capital. So, most of huge companies are located in Seoul. This means that I can see many buildings. I like observing many buildings. Due to these reasons, my second pick is Seoul.

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Hi Kimberly :) 

That's true! Seoul and Busan are terrific places to live in because they're  fun and convenient places. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon

I will pick Busan because in Busan, I can see the sea. 
>> I will pick Busan because I can see the sea there. 

I'm living in the small town which be surrounded by the mountains. 
>> I'm living in a small town which is surrounded by mountains. 

So, I miss the sea. 
>> CORRECT

At the sea, I want to see various kinds of sea creatures like crab.
>> I want to see various kinds of sea creatures like crab by the sea. 

Most of all, I want to see the landscape of peaceful sea. 
>> Most of all, I want to see the landscapes of the peaceful sea. 

Due to these reasons,  I will pick Busan. 
>> Due to these reasons, I will pick Busan. 

My second pick is Seoul because Seoul is South Korean capital. 
>> My second pick is Seoul because it is the capital of South Korea. 

So, most of huge companies are located in Seoul.
 >> CORRECT

This means that I can see many buildings. 
>> CORRECT

I like observing many buildings. 
>> CORRECT

Due to these reasons, my second pick is Seoul.
>> CORRECT
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