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If you could travel back in time, where would you go?

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If I can travel back in time, I wanna go to the lands which are really expensive now.
Before, the price was lower than now so I can buy many things cheaper in the past.
I can buy something that I wanted cheaper than now, and the lands too.
So if I buy some lands near by the cities or the lands which are expensive now, I can have a lot of profits.
And also real estate is one of the most easy ways to earn mush money, so it will be great.
Of course I will use those money for me, but also I will use them for other people.
And if I get a chance, I wanna found my own company.

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Hi John:) 

Smart choice! You can get ahead with that idea. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I can travel back in time, I wanna go to the lands which are really expensive now.
>> CORRECT

Before, the price was lower than now so I can buy many things cheaper in the past.
>> 
Before, the prices were lower than now so I can buy many things cheaper in the past.

I can buy something that I wanted cheaper than now, and the lands too.
>> 
I can buy things and lands at a cheaper price. 

So if I buy some lands near by the cities or the lands which are expensive now, I can have a lot of profits.
>> So if I buy some lands near by the cities or lands that are expensive now, I can have a lot of profit. 

And also real estate is one of the most easy ways to earn mush money, so it will be great.
>> Also, real estate is one of the most easiest way to earn money so it will be great. 

Of course I will use those money for me, but also I will use them for other people.
>> Of course I will use those money for myself, but I will also use it for other people. 

And if I get a chance, I wanna found my own company.
>> And if I get a chance, I want to build my own company. 

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