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Macchu Picchu is the most mysterious place among these

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In my opinion, Macchu Picchu is the most mysterious thing among these. Though all of them are very mysterious, but I think Macchu Picchu is the most mysterious structure. In the case of another things, we can build it again with modern technology. However, there are lots of parts in Macchu Picchu that we build it again with modern technology. Just like the God made, the crack between the walls didn't exist. We can't breathe if we are in this wall and ceiling that are made with these stones. It proves that Macchu Picchu is very elaborate. In conclusion, I think Macchu Picchu is the most mysterious place around the world because of these reasons.

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Hi, Daniel! Thank you for doing your homework. However, you have to work more on sentence construction. Please take note of the corrections.

- Teacher Debbie

In my opinion, Macchu Picchu is the most mysterious thing among these. 
>> In my opinion, Machu Picchu is the most mysterious structure among them. 

Though all of them are very mysterious, but I think Macchu Picchu is the most mysterious structure. 
>> All of them are very mysterious, but I think Machu Picchu is the most enigmatic.

In the case of another things, we can build it again with modern technology. 
>> The other structures could be built again by modern technology.

However, there are lots of parts in Macchu Picchu that we build it again with modern technology. 
>> However, many parts of Machu Picchu couldn't.

Just like the God made, the crack between the walls didn't exist. 
>> It was like Machu Picchu was God-made because things can't penetrate the cracks.

We can't breathe if we are in this wall and ceiling that are made with these stones.
>> We couldn't breathe if we were surrounded by walls and ceilings made of stones.

It proves that Macchu Picchu is very elaborate. 
>> It proves that Machu Picchu is very elaborate.

In conclusion, I think Macchu Picchu is the most mysterious place around the world because of these reasons.
>> In conclusion, I think it is the most mysterious place around the world because of this reason.

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