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Do you think that having a lot of money can make you happy? Why or why not?

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No, I don't. Because I think having a lot of great people is more important than having a lot of money. Through money, I can do many things, but it can't make me happy. I think feelings are valuable. I can't buy it with a lot of money. Money can't make me happy but it can be a way which I can feel happy. For example, having a lot of money can't make me happy but spending a lot of money for the people around me can make me happy. So, I hope that I will not do bad things to have a lot of money in the future.

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Hi Kimberly!

Yes, that is true. Money cannot but memories and our happiness but it can be a way for us to be. So at some point, it is still important. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

No, I don't. 
>> No, I don't because I think having a lot of great people is more important than having a lot of money.

Because I think having a lot of great people is more important than having a lot of money.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

 Through money, I can do many things, but it can't make me happy. 
>> CORRECT

I think feelings are valuable. 
>> I think feelings are more valuable. 

I can't buy it with a lot of money. 
>> CORRECT

Money can't make me happy but it can be a way which I can feel happy. 
>> Money can't make me happy but it can be a way for me to be happy. 

For example, having a lot of money can't make me happy but spending a lot of money for the people around me can make me happy. 
>> CORRECT

So, I hope that I will not do bad things to have a lot of money in the future.
>> So, I hope that I will not do bad things when I have a lot of money in the future. 

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