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What do you think should be done to improve living conditions in your city?

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To improve living conditions, my city should set up the gas because in my town, there aren't gas lines yet. City gas is cheap and useful but there aren't gas lines, so I'm sad. If city gas is set up in my town, residents and my family will be able to live more comfortable life. Also, my city should open a ​subway. My city is not small but there isn't subway. So, when I visit other city, I'm uncomfortable. I hope that I can take a subway.

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To improve living conditions, my city should set up the gas because in my town, there aren't gas lines yet. 
>> To improve living conditions, my city should set up a gas station because there are none in my town. 

City gas is cheap and useful but there aren't gas lines, so I'm sad. 
>> The price of gas in a city is cheap and useful but we don't have it here in our town so I feel sad. 

If city gas is set up in my town, residents and my family will be able to live more comfortable life. 
>> If this would be set up, residents will live more comfortably. 

Also, my city should open a ​subway. 
>> Also, my city should open a subway. 

My city is not small but there isn't subway. 
>> My city is not small but there is not subway here. 

So, when I visit other city, I'm uncomfortable. 
>> So when I visit another country, I feel uncomfortable. 

I hope that I can take a subway.
>> I hope that I can take the subway.

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